The charts below show the percentage of time working adults spent on different activities in a particular country in 1958 and 2008.
The two pie graphs detail statistics about the timetable of employed adults in an unnamed nation from 1958 to 2008.
Overall
, most activities recorded a higher rate of time
allocation except for bedtime and spending time
with loved ones which both saw a downswing. Moreover
, people in this
country spent
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spend
time
at work than any other pursuits.
Performing their work duties, having a sleep and going out with friends and relatives contributed to the majority of time
spent by employees in this
country. In 1958, they allocated a minimally higher proportion of time
at the workplace than sleeping, at 33% and 32%, respectively. While
the former increased by 9%, a 7% reduction was
seen in the percentage of the latter in 2008. Meanwhile, accompanying friends and family members for entertainment dropped from 19% to 6% during the recorded period.
Concerning other activities, downtime at home accounted for 8% at the beginning before increasing to 13% by the end. Similarly
, time
allotted for other hobbies and sports activities also
rose, but more slowly, from 6% to 8%. In contrast
, starting in 1958 at the lowest result of 2%, the figure for commuting increased fourfold to 8%
fifty years later, which surpassed going out.Submitted by Nghỉ hè vui vẻ cả nhà on
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