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The charts below show the results of a questionnaire that asked  visitors to the Parkway Hotel how they rated the hotel's customer  service. The same questionnaire was given to 100 guests in the  years 2005 and 2010.

The charts below show the results of a questionnaire that asked  visitors to the Parkway Hotel how they rated the hotel's customer  service. The same questionnaire was given to 100 guests in the  years 2005 and 2010.
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pie charts compare the views of
people
 who utilized the Parkway
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 customer service in the years
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2005 and 2010.
Overall
, in 2010 the point of
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this
hotel
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of
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in 2005 result. It can be seen that, in 2005 the score of
people
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this
hotel
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 as those of other
comments
 with 45%. The score of
people
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this
hotel
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stayed
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following far behind to previous comment. In terms of other
comments
, they were made up
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 34 per cent
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collectively
. In 2010, the
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comments
 which were  voted to Parkway
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 were higher than those of the percentage of other
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.The comment which was said good , it increased by 25 per cent from 14%to 39%. Another interesting point from the chart is that
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 the percentage of
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the
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satisfactory decreased steadily
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% if we compare the result of 2005. In terms of
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 of
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 significantly apart from the proportion of
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 which was considered
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poor comment.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, hotel, comments with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "compare" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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