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the bar chart given below shows the average rainfall for australia by month for last yeare. the line shows the average rainfall for australia by month for last 40 years.

the bar chart given below shows the average rainfall for australia by month for last yeare. the line shows the average rainfall for australia by month for last 40 years.
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The provided chart gives information about the number of
rainfall
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 in
Australia
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 by
month
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 for
last
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year
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 and how
many
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much
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rainfall
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 was in
Australia
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 for the
last
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 40 years provided by
line
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a line
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 graph. It is obviously seen that the majority of
rainfall
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 was
in
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at
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beginning
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the beginning
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 of the
year
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. Namely January, February and March,
whereas
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 the fewest had in October and August. Getting back to the details the most
rainfall
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 for
Australia
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 for
last
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year
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 by
month
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 was in January,
that
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where
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 the figure was close to 65
mm
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,
whereas
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Linking Words
last
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the last
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 two
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month
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months
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 of summer and
beginning
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the beginning
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 of two
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month
Change to a plural noun
months
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 of autumn recorded the lowest
of
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apply
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rainfall
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,
that
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apply
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it
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which
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 made up under 10
mm
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. The remaining months were average
of
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apply
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rainfall
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 and it accounted
between
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for between
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 20 and 40
mm
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. Average
rainfall
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 in
Australia
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 over the past 40 years is almost the same indicators as
last
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year
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. In January the indicator was 80
mm
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 and in
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last
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the last
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month
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 of
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year
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the year
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 was approximately 65
mm
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last, whereas".
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words rainfall, australia, month, year, mm with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "provided" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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