the bar chart given below shows the average rainfall for australia by month for last yeare. the line shows the average rainfall for australia by month for last 40 years.
The given illustration provides the differences between average rainfall by month for
last
year and last
40 years in Australia.
Correct article usage
the last
Overall
, during this
last
year and forty-year period, January remained the highest rate in
rain, so far we see palpitations in the remaining month.
Change preposition
of
In
Change preposition
Last
last
year August has
the least amount of downpour, Wrong verb form
had
while
during last
four Correct article usage
the last
decades
September Add a comma
decades,
has
the lowest sum, and Wrong verb form
had
then
results dramatically rose in November.
As can be seen from graph
, not only an upward trendAdd an article
the graph
,
but a downward tendency Remove the comma
apply
observed
in April. The amount of 80 millilitres Add a missing verb
was observed
rain
fell sharply to 30 millilitres, Change preposition
of rain
while
May and December remained the same.Submitted by dnm.best on
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