The pie chart below show the online shopping sales for retail sectors in New Zealand in 2003 and 2013.
The pie charts
illustrates
the online market Change the verb form
illustrate
sales
in fragments like travel
, film and music, books and clothes in New Zealand in the years 2003 and 2013
Overall
, it is clear from the graph that travel
and film with music had highest
proportion of Change the article
the highest
in
online Change preposition
apply
sales
on
each year. In Change preposition
apply
additional
, book Replace the word
addition
sales
showed increases, while
sales
in category
clothes decreased
In 2003, Correct article usage
the category
travel
sales
was
in first place at 36%, Change the verb form
were
however
it Add a comma
however,
falled
after Correct your spelling
fell
decade
and reached approximately 30%. Add an article
a decade
Additionally
, film and music sales
was
not Change the verb form
were
Rephrase
as siginificant
siginificant
as Correct your spelling
significant
travel
sales
with just above 20%, but in 2013, it is made up exactly one-third and took significant
proportion Correct article usage
a significant
in
online Change preposition
of
sales
.
In contrast
, books online sales
was
lowest in 2003 with just under one-fifth and it presented Change the verb form
were
slight
rise Correct article usage
a slight
afet
10 years and made up 22%. Correct your spelling
after
Although
, clothes was
the third Change the verb form
were
significant
Correct quantifier usage
most significant
figuer
in 2003 at about Correct your spelling
figure
quarter
, Correct article usage
a quarter
and
it Correct word choice
apply
is
decreased to 16% and made up Unnecessary verb
apply
even
lower fraction than book Correct article usage
an even
sales
in 2003.Submitted by Kawasaki on
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sales, travel with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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