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The two maps below show the changes that have taken place in the town of Westley since 1815. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The two maps below show the changes that have taken place in the town of Westley since 1815. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The maps illustrate the development of Westley
town
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 from 1815 until the present. Over the period, the area witnessed dramatic changes, with the replacement of
railroad
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the railroad
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 over the fields at the Southwest side of the
town
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, and the
Lenton
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 Woods were deforested to make way for
housing
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a housing
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 estate. In 1815, there used to be a bridge crossing over the Twine Toll River on the Northwest of the
town
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 leading to London. On the Southwest side,
on the other hand
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, were the nutrition-rich fields, where townpeople used to grow crops. Towards the Southeast part, there were
housing
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a housing
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 complex, the
townhall
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town hall
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 and
market
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the market
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 square,
while
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 the Northeastern areas located the Triton Village, Lord Westley's House,
Lenton
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 Woods and the Lake.
Church
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The church
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 was situated at the centre of the
town
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. In the present-day map, the huge land of fields
have
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has
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 been replaced by the railway system and a cinema.
Although
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 the
town
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 hall and market square remain standing
at
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in
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 the present day, many houses were demolished to develop a modern business and residential area. Another
sigificant
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significant
 change observed is the
Lenton
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 Housing Estate,
which
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in which
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 a mass volume of
woods
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wood
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 were cut down to clear the land for the
Lenton
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 Housing Estate.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words town, lenton with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "present" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • residential area
  • amenities
  • thoroughfare
  • connectivity
  • industrial development
  • factory
  • public amenities
  • recreational facilities
  • educational facilities
  • residential expansion
  • apartment blocks
  • commercial activity
  • shopping centers
  • restaurants
  • single-family homes
  • development
  • open field
  • noticeable change
  • replacing
  • establishment
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