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Most countries allow 18-year olds to start driving a car. Some say it is good to allow at this age. But others think that the age to start driving should be at least 25. Discuss both the views and give your opinion.

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Some section of people believe that the best
age
of driving
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 is 18
while
other
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others
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 think that the
age
 should be raised to 25 , as far as I am concerned I think 18 is the best
age
 to start driving.
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with
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 we all know that the young person has a great ability for learning new things and skills rather than the old person,
Thus
 18 years old would be the ideal
age
 for driving.
Furthermore
 driving at
early
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age
 could be beneficial for younger students
due to
 the fact that at
this
age
 they attend university
ther
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there
 for they
could
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 drive to their courses which
help
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 them in
term
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 of gaining
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time . On the
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hand
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other
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 believe that driving shouldn't be allowed at 18 years old ,
due to
 the safety of the community we all know that children
at
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adolescent
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 are adventurous and less responsible which could cause accidents and other problems. In
conclusion
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 it's obvious that driving at 18 years old is beneficial for persons, so the benefits outweigh the risks.
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task achievement
The essay presents both viewpoints, but some arguments are not fully developed. Add more detailed reasoning and examples to support each point of view.
coherence cohesion
There are a few grammatical issues and awkward phrasings that can affect readability. Try to proofread your work for minor errors.
coherence cohesion
Some parts of the essay lack clear transitions. Improve the flow of your essay by using cohesive devices to link your ideas together more effectively.
task achievement
You have clearly stated your opinion in the introduction and conclusion, which gives a sense of completeness to your essay.
task achievement
Your essay covers both viewpoints, which shows you understand the prompt and can analyze different perspectives.
coherence cohesion
The structure of your essay is logical, starting with an introduction and ending with a conclusion.

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