The chart below shows the number of adults participating in different major sports in one area, in 1997 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the number of adults participating in different major sports in one area, in 1997 and 2017. 

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Overall
,
number
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the number
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of adults participating in major
sports
increases
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increased
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from 1997 to 2017. And the popularity has some changes between these years.
Firstly
,
the
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apply
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participating
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participation
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number
of most
sports
improve except for cricket and swimming. Cricket has the worst performance among all,
which
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with
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the participating
number
decreases
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decreasing
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by about 20
thousands
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thousand
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. As for swimming, the participating
number
in 2017 remains exactly the same as
1997
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in 1997
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according to
the figure.
Secondly
, let's look at the rest of
sports
. The other
sports
that the
number
of adults participating
increases
the most
,
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are football, basketball and rugby, with all of them increasing by about 15
thousands
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thousand
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.
Besides
, tennis
increases
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increased
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by about 5
thousands
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thousand
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. As for golf, it slightly
increases
by 1 or 2
thousands
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thousand
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, which is almost the same. The popularity of these
sports
has changed. In 1997, the most popular sport in
this
figure
is
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was
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tennis,
which
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and
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the situation
remains
Wrong verb form
remained
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the same in 2017.
However
, for the least popular sport, it is different. Basketball
is
Wrong verb form
was
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the least popular sport in 1997,
while
cricket
becomes
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became
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the least popular one in 2017.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, sports, increases, thousands with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increases" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "remains" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • participation rate
  • increase/decrease in numbers
  • trend
  • decade
  • relatively stable
  • major sports
  • potential reasons
  • contributing factors
  • public interest
  • comparison
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