The chart below shows the number of adults participating in different major sports in one area, in 1997 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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number

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the number

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of adults participating in major

sports

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increases

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from 1997 to 2017. And the popularity has some changes between these years.

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the

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apply

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participating

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participation

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number

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of most

sports

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improve except for cricket and swimming. Cricket has the worst performance among all,

which

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with

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the participating

number

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decreases

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decreasing

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by about 20

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thousands

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thousand

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. As for swimming, the participating

number

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in 2017 remains exactly the same as

1997

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in 1997

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according to

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the figure.

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, let's look at the rest of

sports

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. The other

sports

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that the

number

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of adults participating

increases

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the most

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are football, basketball and rugby, with all of them increasing by about 15

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thousands

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thousand

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Besides

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, tennis

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increases

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by about 5

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thousands

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thousand

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. As for golf, it slightly

increases

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by 1 or 2

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thousands

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thousand

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, which is almost the same. The popularity of these

sports

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has changed. In 1997, the most popular sport in

this

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figure

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was

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tennis,

which

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and

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the situation

remains

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remained

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the same in 2017.

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, for the least popular sport, it is different. Basketball

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was

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the least popular sport in 1997,

while

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cricket

becomes

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became

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the least popular one in 2017.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
4
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

178 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

participation rate
increase/decrease in numbers
trend
decade
relatively stable
major sports
potential reasons
contributing factors
public interest
comparison

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