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The pie chart below depicts energy generation by fuel type in the UK in two years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie chart below depicts energy generation by fuel type in the UK in two years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie chart above shows
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 of energy generation by fuel type in the United Kingdom in 2014 and 2018.
Overall
, the type of oil and other and gas still maintain its percentage, respectively 4 per
cent
 and 30,1 per
cent
.
While
,
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other
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others
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 have some changes. In 2014, oil and
other's
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kind
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 had
percentage
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at
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 4 per
cent
 and constantly
same
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 in
year
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 2018.
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 to
other
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, in 2014, renewable became the fourth rank in energy generation with about 15 per
cent
.
Then
,
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 up to 26.2 per
cent
. Meanwhile, nuclear experienced a
slightly
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 decrease
phenomenon
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.
In other words
, in 2014 they got 22.5 per
cent
 and in 2018 only around 21.6 per
cent
.
Subsequently
, there is
gas
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a gas
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 that stagnantly in
a
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 same portion in different years, which is 30.1%.
Lastly
, in 2018, coal was one and only
the
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kind of energy generation that slumped
until
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 10 per
cent
 than year 2014. From 28.4 per
cent
 to 18.1 per
cent
.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words cent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • depicts
  • energy generation
  • fuel type
  • traditional fuels
  • renewable energy
  • alternative fuels
  • significant increase
  • substantial decrease
  • transition fuel
  • environmental policies
  • notable changes
  • share of energy
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