You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The bar chart shows the monthly spending in dollars of a family in the USA on three items in 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The bar chart shows the monthly spending in dollars of a family in the USA on three items in 2010.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.
The bar charts
illustrates
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illustrate
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the monthly
expenditure
in
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for
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three items in a
4 month
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4-month
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period in 2010. On keen observation, in
month
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the month
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of
Jan
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Jan,
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the most
money
was spent on food and
least
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the least
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on clothing which showed an odd change in the Feb, with
most
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the most
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money
spent on food and clothing.
However
, fluctuation
observed
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was observed
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in
march
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March
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where
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when
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overall
the
money
expenditure
peaked in all three categories. The fluctuation caused a disparity in
april
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April
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with spending
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on averagely
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averagely
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average
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the least amount of
money
.
Furthermore
, all three
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categories
catergories
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categories
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apply
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was
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apply
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peaked in
different
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a different
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months
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month
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months
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such
as food in Feb,
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and clothing
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clothing
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and clothing
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and gas in April.
Overall
, the average
money
expenditure
was maintain
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was maintained
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throughout the first 2 months which
fluctuate
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fluctuated
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in
march
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March
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and marked peak
monthy
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monthly
expenditure
, the fluctuation later took a dive in
april
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April
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall".
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words expenditure, money with synonyms.
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