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The bar chart shows the monthly spending in dollars of a family in the USA on three items in 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart shows the monthly spending in dollars of a family in the USA on three items in 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar charts
illustrates
Change the verb form
illustrate
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 the monthly
expenditure
Use synonyms
in
Change preposition
for
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 three items in a
4 month
Add a hyphen
4-month
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 period in 2010. On keen observation, in
month
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the month
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 of
Jan
Add a comma
Jan,
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 the most
money
Use synonyms
 was spent on food and
least
Correct article usage
the least
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 on clothing which showed an odd change in the Feb, with
most
Add an article
the most
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money
Use synonyms
 spent on food and clothing.
However
Linking Words
, fluctuation
observed
Add a missing verb
was observed
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 in
march
Capitalize word
March
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where
Correct word choice
when
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overall
Linking Words
 the
money
Use synonyms
expenditure
Use synonyms
 peaked in all three categories. The fluctuation caused a disparity in
april
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April
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 with spending
Change preposition
on averagely
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averagely
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average
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 the least amount of
money
Use synonyms
.
Furthermore
Linking Words
, all three
Correct your spelling
categories
catergories
Correct your spelling
categories
Unnecessary verb
apply
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was
Verb problem
apply
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peaked in
different
Add an article
a different
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Fix the agreement mistake
months
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month
Fix the agreement mistake
months
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such
Linking Words
 as food in Feb,
Correct word choice
and clothing
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clothing
Correct word choice
and clothing
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 and gas in April.
Overall
Linking Words
, the average
money
Use synonyms
expenditure
Use synonyms
was maintain
Change the verb form
was maintained
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 throughout the first 2 months which
fluctuate
Wrong verb form
fluctuated
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 in
march
Capitalize word
March
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 and marked peak
monthy
Correct your spelling
monthly
expenditure
Use synonyms
, the fluctuation later took a dive in
april
Change the capitalization
April
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words expenditure, money with synonyms.
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