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In many parts of the world, there is not enough food for everyone. What do you think are the causes of this? What solutions can you suggest?

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In many
parts
 of the
world
, there is not enough
food
 for
everyone
. What do you think are the
causes
 of
this
? What
solutions
 can you suggest?In many
parts
 of the
world
, there is not enough
food
 for
everyone
. What do you think are the
causes
 of
this
? What
solutions
 can you suggest?In many
parts
 of the
world
, there is not enough
food
 for
everyone
. What do you think are the
causes
 of
this
? What
solutions
 can you suggest?In many
parts
 of the
world
, there is not enough
food
 for
everyone
. What do you think are the
causes
 of
this
? What
solutions
 can you suggest?In many
parts
 of the
world
, there is not enough
food
 for
everyone
. What do you think are the
causes
 of
this
? What
solutions
 can you suggest?In many
parts
 of the
world
, there is not enough
food
 for
everyone
. What do you think are the
causes
 of
this
? What
solutions
 can you suggest?
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task achievement
It appears you have repeated the prompt multiple times instead of providing an essay response. Try to write a full essay with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion.
task achievement
Make sure to develop your main points with supporting details and specific examples to illustrate your arguments.
coherence cohesion
Organize your essay logically, with a clear structure. Each paragraph should focus on one main idea that supports your overall argument.
coherence cohesion
Start with an introduction that clearly states the problem and your thesis. Conclude with a summary of your main points and a reaffirmation of your thesis.
general
Your topic is relevant and important; it’s a good choice for an essay.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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