Traditions are about the past and innovation is about the future, and it has been argued that we need to let go of traditions for the sake of progress. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this? What role should traditions have in our lives? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should spend about 40 minutes on this task.
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to maintain their social relationships.
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For instance
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People
also
can benefit from the traditional customs
, especially social relationship
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relationships
such
as parents and their children, friends and family. To maintain a healthy relationship, people
need to set up a list of behaviour rules depending on their situations which the elderly are very skillful at. In fact, the group of elderly people
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today.
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people
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can take advantage of traditional customs
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