The table below shows a survey on the preference of three age groups for different TV programmes in a European country in 2012.

The table below shows a survey on the preference of three age groups for different TV programmes in a European country in 2012.
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The table graph provides the result of a survey about the preference of audiences in three age groups to consume different TV shows in a nation of
European
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Europe
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in 2012.
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, cartoon shows have the highest teenage
audience
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;
however
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, audiences of 15-20 years old prefer feature films, which show the same data as
adults
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watching news. It is obvious that most teenagers love watching cartoons (29%),
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only 4% of
adults
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spent
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time on cartoon shows. Most of the 15-20-year-old
audience
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loves feature films,
accounted
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for 23%
the
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of the
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same as
adults
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consume
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who consume
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news.
Neverthelss
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Nevertheless
, only 6% of
teeanagers
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teenagers
watched
news
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the news
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. In terms
soap
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of soap
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opera, which has
similar
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a similar
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amount of
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audience
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audiences
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in each
ages
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age
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group for
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a teenager
the teenager
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teenager
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teenagers
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, 15-20-years old
audience
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, and
adults
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, with 17%,12% and 19%, respectively. 13%
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adults
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of adults
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watched TV dramas , similar
with
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to
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15-20 young people with 10%. Even though teenagers do not
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spend
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much time on TV dramas, they do love
watch
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watching
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sports
wich
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which
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made up 22%, followed by
adults
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at 21%.
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, 18% 15-20 years old
audience
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also
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sonsume
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consume
sports programmes.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 73%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words audience, adults with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 4 times.
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