The diagrams below show changes of a cinema from 1980 until now. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagrams below show changes of a cinema from 1980 until now. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The two plans illustrate
development
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the development
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of a
cinema
from 1980 to the present.
Overall
, there are some places unchanged like the entry, a ticket room, and toilets.
However
, a car park
had
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was
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removed and replaced by new
cinema
rooms. In 1980 , the
cinema
buliding
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building
had
the
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a
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car park along the south of the building, and
cinema
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Cinema
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2 was located on the left
side
while
a
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apply
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cinema
1 in the northwest
side
,
also
ticket and drinks were situated on the northeast
side
.
In addition
, the main gate, ticket and toilets remain at the same place.
In
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At
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the
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apply
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present, the car park
is
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has been
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removed and replaced by two cinemas (
cinema
3 in the right corner and
the
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apply
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cinema
2 moved to the opposite
side
).
Moreover
,
cinema
2 old place which is located on the right
side
was replaced
into
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with
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cinema
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Cinema
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4 and they added
cinema
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Cinema
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5 next to it.
Furthermore
, on the northeast corner are built new
room
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rooms
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could relax room next to
Food
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the Food
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and drinks area.
Also
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Also,
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the old place
of
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for
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drink
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the drink
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is replaced by
DVD
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a DVD
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shop.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
Introduction: The introduction is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words cinema, side with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "present" was used 2 times.

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