The map shows the town of Stokeford in 1930 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
The maps illustrate the change in Stokeford between 1930 and 2010.
Overall
, the key differences between the two maps is
the reconstruction of the farmland and the increasing area of residential area.
There were two farmlands in Stokeford in 1930, located in the south-western and the north-eastern part of the town respectively. The two farmlands were converted into a Change the verb form
are
large-size
housing area with multiple Correct your spelling
large
newly-built
roads in 2010, which expanded the housing zone in Stokeford. Correct your spelling
newly built
Furthermore
, the shops which were adjacent to the north-south main road crossing through the town were also
substituted by houses and a road.
Moreover
, the gardens lying in the centre of Stokefode were replaced by houses, and the large houses in them were finally
transformed into a retirement home in 2010, keeping the trees there. However
, the bridge standing over the river in the southern zone was preserved, and so did
the post office next to the previous shops. Verb problem
was
Additionally
, the primary school opposite to
the post office was enlarged to twice the size of the original one.Change preposition
apply
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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