The map shows the town of Stokeford in 1930 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The map shows the town of Stokeford in 1930 and 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.
The maps illustrate the change in Stokeford between 1930 and 2010.
Overall
, the key differences between the two maps
is
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the reconstruction of the farmland and the increasing area of residential area. There were two farmlands in Stokeford in 1930, located in the south-western and the north-eastern part of the town respectively. The two farmlands were converted into a
large-size
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housing area with multiple
newly-built
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roads in 2010, which expanded the housing zone in Stokeford.
Furthermore
, the shops which were adjacent to the north-south main road crossing through the town were
also
substituted by houses and a road.
Moreover
, the gardens lying in the centre of Stokefode were replaced by houses, and the large houses in them were
finally
transformed into a retirement home in 2010, keeping the trees there.
However
, the bridge standing over the river in the southern zone was preserved, and so
did
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the post office next to the previous shops.
Additionally
, the primary school opposite
to
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the post office was enlarged to twice the size of the original one.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • town
  • population
  • transformed
  • bustling
  • road network
  • residential areas
  • industrial sites
  • commercial zones
  • river
  • public transportation
  • infrastructure
  • schools
  • hospitals
  • shopping centers
  • educational facilities
  • healthcare facilities
  • urbanization
  • development
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