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The two maps below show the site of a college in 2006 and the present day. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The two maps below show the site of a college in 2006 and the present day. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The two maps represent
the
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Lynwich
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college
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College
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 in 2006 and how it is now after the modifications .
Overall
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, there has been a drastic change in the structure of the
college
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 within the same available space .
As a result
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, the main attraction is the centrally located cafeteria with access to all other facilities .
In addition
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 to that, most of the trees
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 the compound have been preserved . The cafeteria located in the middle with corridors to the main facilities is the main attraction of the present-day
college
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 .
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 in the past it was a path connecting the second
college
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 building to the library .
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While the
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 trees between the two
college
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 buildings have been removed and the library occupies that area now .
Whereas
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 ,the trees towards the road have been preserved with
an
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 addition of
bus
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a bus
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 stop in the previous car park location . There is an addition of
sports
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a sports
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 centre and bike storage in the new
college
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 by restructuring the previous location . The tree behind the old library is still there but now it is behind
sports
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the sports
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 centre

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas".
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words college with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • underwent significant changes
  • consisted of
  • large open space
  • utilized
  • relocated
  • limited facilities and amenities
  • wider range of facilities and amenities
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