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The maps show improvements that have been made to a university campus between 2010 and the present day. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps show improvements that have been made to a university campus between 2010 and the present day. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The diagram provides us with the recent renovations done to a university
campus
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 from 2010 until now. It is clearly shown that the landscapes are up to date with the new innovative designs.
On
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 the next part, features of the place will be described.
To begin
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 with, the most
eye catching
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 feature shown is the lake and lawn & seating area which is located in the middle with special features
such
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 as the grass.
On the
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The
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 south and west
shows
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show
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 the main feature of the
the
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apply
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campus
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 which is student
accomadation
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accommodation
 where the buildings look similar with
same
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the same
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 colour but just different height
level
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levels
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.
On the other hand
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, on the east
side
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side,
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 there are shops and
restaurant
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restaurants
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 located next to each other. By the road on the north
side
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side,
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 it has
teaching
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a teaching
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 block for art & science
student
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students
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. On the other side of the road is the location of the university offices. Taking everything into
concideration
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consideration
, the improvements done to the
campus
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 are really up to date with the trend now. But there are things they need to improve which is growing some grass
in
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on
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 the
campus
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 inable to have
a
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an
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eyecatching
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eye-catching
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 and not a dry lawn.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words campus with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • campus
  • renovation
  • infrastructure
  • facilities
  • sustainable
  • accessibility
  • layout
  • pedestrian zones
  • transportation routes
  • parking facilities
  • greenery
  • sports center
  • lecture halls
  • demolition
  • modernize
  • expansion
  • enhancement
  • comprehensive development
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