The maps show improvements that have been made to a university campus between 2010 and the present day. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The maps show improvements that have been made to a university campus between 2010 and the present day.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.
The map illustrates the university
campus
of 2010.
In
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the north
side
of the
campus
,
there's
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there are
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the university offices and
teaching
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a teaching
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block for Art and Science. Following the path, there's the student
accomodation
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accommodation
following through and a huge
lake
across
of
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it.
In
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the east
side
of the
campus
, there's an
enomous
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enormous
field that was
build
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built
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. It is filled up with the
lake
, shops,
another
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other
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accomodation
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accommodation
, and
restaurant
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a restaurant
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. The
area
is
also
filled with trees. The student
accomodation
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accommodation
in
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on
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the west
side
is smaller than the ones in the west, it is
also
nearer
with
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to
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the
lake
. At the edge of the map, there's a small
restaurant
that was
build
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. Near the
restaurant
, a bit north
side
of the
restaurant
, there are two shops, completing the
area
. At the main attraction of the
area
, the
lake
is filled with
bunch
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of
lawn
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lawns
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and seating
area
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areas
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, even if it's considered small, it is still the biggest part of the west
area
. In conclusion, the
campus
is filled with
bunch
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a bunch
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of facilities.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words campus, side, lake, restaurant, area with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • campus
  • renovation
  • infrastructure
  • facilities
  • sustainable
  • accessibility
  • layout
  • pedestrian zones
  • transportation routes
  • parking facilities
  • greenery
  • sports center
  • lecture halls
  • demolition
  • modernize
  • expansion
  • enhancement
  • comprehensive development
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