You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The chart gives employment and education statistics for eight European countries in 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words. Employment rates, education and averange anuual income, 2015: Country, Employment rate, Average income
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The graphic represents the mean wages of 7 cities in the UK . there is a difference of around 8000 pounds between the highest and lowest paid towns .
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overall
,the chart gives the number
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per city and the average salaries in that city .In addition
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number
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London , England has the highest pay of 33,634 from 50951 Remove the comma
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. whereas
Cambridge England is at
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second place with 29,854 pounds, Correct article usage
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while
the number
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there is the least at 2180 .Moreover
Bristol as well as
Edinburgh has
almost similar wages .
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,Manchester and Glasgow share almost at par salaries meanwhile, Glasgow being
slightly more . Wrong verb form
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, Birmingham has more
sample size than Edinburgh and Cambridge but the wages Fix the agreement mistake
a larger
is
at the lowest among the 7 cities at 25,531 pounds only . The sample size though 2949Change the verb form
are
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