You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The chart gives employment and education statistics for eight European countries in 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words. Employment rates, education and averange anuual income, 2015: Country, Employment rate, Average income

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The chart gives employment and education statistics for eight European countries in 2015.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.

Employment rates, education and averange anuual income, 2015: Country, Employment rate, Average income
The graphic represents the mean wages of 7 cities in the UK .
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, it gives information about the
number
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in each group
overall
,the chart gives the
number
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per city and the average salaries in that city .
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there is a difference of around 8000 pounds between the highest and lowest paid towns .
According to
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the
number
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in the top paid location is more than 10 times of others
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London , England has the highest pay of 33,634 from 50951
samples
.
whereas
Cambridge England is
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second place with 29,854 pounds,
while
the
number
of
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there is the least at 2180 .
Moreover
Bristol
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Edinburgh
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almost similar wages .
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,Manchester and Glasgow share almost at par salaries meanwhile, Glasgow
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slightly more .
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, Birmingham has
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a larger
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sample size than Edinburgh and Cambridge but the wages
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at the lowest among the 7 cities at 25,531 pounds only . The sample size though 2949
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