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The following two pie charts display the results of a survey into the popularity of different leisure activities among European adults in 1985 and 1995. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The following two pie charts display the results of a survey into the popularity of different leisure activities among European adults in 1985 and 1995. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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Two
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The two
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 pie charts provided
reveals
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reveal
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 the conclusion of a study about the different free-time activities in the company of
adults
 from Europe in 1985 and 1995.
Overall
,
individuals
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individual
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 preferences changed a lot in 1 decade.
Firstly
, the most popular leisure activity in 1985 was watching TV, which nearly
third
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a third
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 of
nation
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the nation
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 used to do. Almost a quarter of
adults
 used to eat out in their free time,
while
 21% of them used to talk with their friends in
this
 years. 18% of European
adults
 had talking with family as their favourite leisure activity. Only 6% of
adults
 had
another preferences
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another preference
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 and used to do other activities in 1985. Watching
tv
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TV
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 was
favourite
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the favourite
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 leisure activity of 30% of Europeans,
meanwhile
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meanwhile,
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 roughly a quarter of them enjoyed
to talk
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talking
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 with friends in 1995. The
amount
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number
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 of people who used to talk with family decreased from 21% to 7% and quantity of
adults
 who eat out in their free time reduced from 23% to 7% in 10 years. 27% of
population
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the population
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 of Europe enjoyed playing computer games,
meanwhile
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meanwhile,
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 2% of
population
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the population
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 enjoyed other activities
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Vocabulary: Replace the words adults with synonyms.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • survey results
  • popularity
  • leisure activities
  • European adults
  • significant rise
  • steady
  • collectively
  • slight increase
  • emerged
  • accounting for
  • percentage of people
  • new leisure activity
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