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Writing Task 1 You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The plans below show a student accommodation buildings 2010 and now. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant You should write at least 150 words.

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This
 is a summary of differences
of
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 a student
accomodation
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accommodation
 building's
plan
 between 2010 and
present
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. The main differences between both plans are in the number of
rooms
. In
2010
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plan
, there are 6
rooms
,
meanwhile
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 you can find that there are additional 2
rooms
 on the recent
plan
. On the exterior, the building
was
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used to be surrounded by gardens from the front to the back,
then
 later the front garden was turned into a car parking
area
. On the inside, as you enter from the main entrance through the hallway, you
would
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 find the entrances of two separate
rooms
. The first door is to enter a
student-bedroom
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student bedroom
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 and the second entryway would lead you to the shared bathroom for all the tenants. After the hallway, you take a left turn and find
other
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the other
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 two entryways. The first door leads to another
student
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student's
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 bedroom, and the latter leads to the kitchen
area
. So far, the sequence remains the same in both
plan
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, but
on
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 the second
student-bedroom
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student bedroom
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, there is an additional en-suite room attached to it. The kitchen which
solely
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 used for
dining
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the dining
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area
also
 functions as a socialization room.
Then
 after the second hall, you will take a left turn and find a door to
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the livingroom
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livingroom
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living room
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. In the recent
plan
,
this
 is changed to another
student-bedroom
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student bedroom
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, with
additional
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an additional
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student-bedroom
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student bedroom
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 attached to it.
At the end
 of the hallway, you will find a new
student-bedroom
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student bedroom
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 that
was
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used to be
garden
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a garden
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area
.
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coherence cohesion
Consider breaking down long paragraphs into shorter ones to improve readability and ensure each main point gets the attention it deserves.
task achievement
Make sure to describe all relevant features clearly, such as the transformation of the living room and its impact on overall space usage.
coherence cohesion
Ensure consistency in tense usage to improve the clarity and flow of your writing.
task achievement
The essay provides a detailed comparison of the student accommodation building's plans between 2010 and the present.
coherence cohesion
The usage of spatial description to compare the two plans is adept and helps in visualizing the changes.

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