The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features,and make comparisons where relevant.
The provided line graph illustrates the
percentage
of the crowd for people
who are more than 65 years
old in three various countries in a century.
A glance at the graph reveals that the population
of Sweden have had a fluctuation
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fluctuating
trend
.However
,the crowd of people
has witnessed dramatic changes over the period.
In 1940,the proportion of population
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the population
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people
who were 65 years
old or more
was %7 in Sweden.After that,Correct word choice
older
trend
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the trend
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has
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trend
from 1940 to 2024.Then
,the percentage
of population
will have reached precisely %25 in Sweden by 2040.Add an article
the population
Moreover
,the proportion of
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the population
population
aged more than 65 years
old was nearly %9 in the United States of America in 1940.Next,the number of cro
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crowds
people
more than 65 years
old has increased moderately until 2024.At the end
of the trend
,the percentage
of
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the population
population
will have hit t
he peak at %23 in the US by 2040.
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In contrast
,the proportion of people
who were more than 65 years
old was only %5 in Japan
in 1940.(Which was the least percentage
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the eldery
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elderly
population
over the period).For the next few decades,the number of ol
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people
in ages over 65 years
old declined slightly in Japan
.Afterwards,this
trend
will have risen modestly in Japan
until approximately 2030.Finally
,the percentage
of
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the population
population
over 65 years
old will rocket in Japan
from 2030 to 2040.Submitted by TUTOO on
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, people, years, population, trend, japan with synonyms.
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