You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The charts below show the percentages of men and women aged 60-64 in employment in four countries in 1970 and 2000 Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The charts below show the percentages of men and women aged 60-64 in employment in four countries in 1970 and 2000

Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

You should write at least 150 words.
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The bar chart shows the percentage of men and women aged 60-64 in employment in four
countries
in 1970 and 2000.
Overall
, the Senior Citizens who are working in four different
countries
Australia, Japan, the USA and Belgium during the period of 1970 and 2000. The gender of men who are getting old are still working in these four
countries
Australia, Japan, USA and Belgium. In 1970, the working people's age of work was very high at the time and their percentage was at the in those nations. After that, it started to reduce year by year. In 2000 the number of people who are working in the older age was reduced. The Senior citizens of women working employees at the time 1970 were sitting at the top of the bar chart and they worked very hard during that period. But still, in the year 2000, the working women percentage gradually decreased in two
countries
and in the other two nations they increased by 2-3%. Somehow the elderly people are still working for their needs.
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