In some countries, most people prefer to rent a house rather than buy their houses. What are the advantages of renting a home? Should governments subsidies house prices for first home buyers?

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In some

countries

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there are some individuals who prefer to have their own houses rather than rent a

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. I reckon, there are some advantages

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renting

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accommodation. In

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essay

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house

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rental and governments providing

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financial support for

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first-home

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buyers. There are many advantages of the

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rental systems.

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, the main advantage of living in a rented

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is flexibility. It is quite easy to change your place of residence if sudden circumstances or job changes.

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: getting a new job in a different city. Noticing to landlord and moving to a new place makes the transition

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and

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, without worrying about selling the current

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house

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rental

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have no risk associated with value decline. Owning a

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is risky as the value

property

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of property

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can

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fluctuate

due to

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various factors

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as market conditions, economic downturns and changes in the neighbourhoods.

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, renting is beneficial because

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in property value wouldn't affect

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. In my view,

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the government's

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increased financial support is essential for first-time

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buyers.

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can provide essential support for young or low-income families striving to enter the housing market. By reducing the financial barriers to

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ownership,

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can enable more people to achieve

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milestone and foster long-term economic

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for individuals and families.

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ownership has been linked to various social benefits, including greater community involvement and

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Subsidies

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can encourage

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ownership, potentially leading to more stable and engaged communities. In conclusion,

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renting a

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have

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several benefits as flexibility and financial

stability

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, I believe that government

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for first

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owners

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crucial for

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