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The table below gives information on consumer spending on different items in five different countries in 2002

The table below gives information on consumer spending on different items in five different countries in 2002
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The given chart illustrates utilizer spending on various items in five nations: Ireland, Italy, Spain, Sweden and Turkey in 2002. In general, the percentage of expenditure spent on
food
,
drinks
 and
tobacco
 in Turkey was far higher than that of other countries. It was not only
leader
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a leader
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 in
this
 field but
also
it
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apply
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spent much money on leisure and education.
To begin
 with, the expenses used for
food
,
drinks
, and
tobacco
 in Turkey
was
Correct subject-verb agreement
were
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 higher than
that
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those
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 of others and
it
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they
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 accounted for
jus
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just
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 under a third.
However
,
it's
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its
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 expenditure was lower than that of Italy on clothing and
footwear
, it was a leader in
leisure
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the leisure
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 and education area. If we look at other nations, the expenses spent on
food
,
drinks
 and
tobacco
 in Sweden
was
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were
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 at
lower
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a lower
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 level than that of others.
It's
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Its
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 expenditure used for clothing and
footwear
 was
also
 the lowest index in 5 nations. It didn't spend plenty of money on
food
,
drinks
,
tobacco
and
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apply
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clothing,
footwear
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or footwear
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. The proportion of expenses spent on clothing and
footwear
 constituted 9%
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words food, drinks, tobacco, footwear with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumer spending
  • items
  • countries
  • comparison
  • overview
  • table
  • data
  • information
  • proportion
  • percentage
  • figures
  • categories
  • expenditure
  • purchases
  • spending habits
  • trends
  • average
  • highest
  • lowest
  • variation
  • pattern
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