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The chats below show the percentage of students joining North West University.

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The pie charts provide information about the proportion of
students
 in different faculties and the regional distribution of art
faculty
students
 at
North West
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North-West
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 University.
It is clear that
 the majority of
students
 chose the business
faculty
, followed by computing.
In contrast
, fewer
students
 opt for medicine and law.
Moreover
, the second pie chart shows that most arts
students
 are South American. Looking at the information in more detail, the proportion of
students
 in the art
faculty
 accounts for 23%. The percentages of computing and science are similar, at 22% and 21%, respectively.
Additionally
, 14% of
students
 are in the business
faculty
, and the other categories—engineering, medicine, and law—are each less than 10%. In terms of the number of art
students
, it can be seen that the largest figure is in South America with 79
students
, followed by 21
students
 from Europe. As for the number of Asian and Australian
students
, there are 6 and 4, respectively.
Furthermore
, only 3
students
 come from Africa
according to
 the chart.
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coherence cohesion
Your essay is well-organized and easy to follow. However, to get an even higher score, consider providing a brief concluding sentence to summarize the main points.
coherence cohesion
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task achievement
To achieve full marks in task response, include more specific data points and comparisons that highlight key insights drawn from the charts.
task achievement
Try to elaborate a bit more on the less represented faculties to provide a comprehensive view of all data.
task achievement
You have clearly addressed all parts of the prompt and the data has been accurately interpreted.
coherence cohesion
Your essay is relatively well-structured, with a clear introduction, body, and observations.
task achievement
The use of specific numbers and percentages helps to support your main points effectively.

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