The chart shows information about various professions in the UK and their salaries. The table shows the average working hours per week for each profession.
the chart
illustrate
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illustrates
informations
about the Change the wording
information
pieces of information
saliaries
of various professions in the UK Correct your spelling
salaries
while
the table shows the basic working hours
per week for each profession.Well,there are many notable things that can be observed.Overall
,we can see that underground
Correct article usage
the underground
driver
has the highest salary
although
this
teachers and firefighters have the highest working Correct determiner usage
these
hours
with approximately 55 working hour
for both.
On the one hand,we can see that Fix the agreement mistake
hours
nurse
and police are Fix the agreement mistake
nurses
in
the bottom of the list with the Change preposition
at
lowst
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lowest
salary
when started and after three years.Morover
,Correct your spelling
Moreover
underground
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the underground
an underground
driver
has the highest salary
in both starting salary
and after three years salary
.In
addition
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addition,
teacher
and fire Fix the agreement mistake
teachers
fighter
have Fix the agreement mistake
fighters
neraly
the same Correct your spelling
nearly
salary
with the diffrence
Correct your spelling
difference
10,000
between Change preposition
of 10,000
both
.
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them
On the other hand
,we can observe alot
of things in the table.First of all, firefighters and teachers are Correct your spelling
a lot
in
the top of the list with nearly 55 our of working in each.Change preposition
at
Further more
, underground Correct your spelling
Furthermore
driver
, Fix the agreement mistake
drivers
nurse
and police have approximately the same working Fix the agreement mistake
nurses
hours
.underground driver
have the Fix the agreement mistake
drivers
lowst
working Correct your spelling
lowest
hours
with nearly 36 hour
.Change to a plural noun
hours
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