The charts below show the number of Japanese tourists travelling abroad between 1985 and 1995 and Australia´s share of the Japanese tourist markey. Summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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Firstly
, I am going to make a comparison to the number of Japanese tourists travelling abroad between 1985 and 1995. I would like to start by comparing the first 5 years
from what I can see the numbers are getting higher not a single drop in the first five years
it is like there is a pattern
. In the last
5 years
, it has been different you may wonder how? will in 1990 it was around twelve million tourists but in 1991 there is a sudden drop it is like the pattern
stopped then
it went up again in 1992 but it stayed almost the same in 1993 hence
, in 1994 it rose again and in 1995 it was the highest year of them all. Lastly
, to sum everything up the highest year in numbers was 1995 and the lowest was 1985, the first five years
had the same pattern
but the last
five years
were shifting and had no pattern
at all.Submitted by alaanoudaltammaami on
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