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A magazine wants to include contributions from its readers for an article called 'The book that influenced me the most’. a Write a letter to the editor of the a magazine about the book that influenced you most. In your letter, • describe what this book was about • explain how this book influenced you • say whether this book would be likely to influence other people

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Dear Sir, I saw an article in yesterday's magazine that if anyone wants to contribute an article in a magazine about " The
book
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 that influenced me the most". I am writing
this
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 letter to show my interest in that and see if
i
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I
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 can get a chance to
tell
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talk
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 about my favourite
book
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. Basically, I read motivational books or books that are based on
real life
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story
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stories
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 rather than fictional books.
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, my top most favourite
book
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 is "Rich
dad
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Dad
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 and
poor dad
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Poor Dad
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".
This
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book
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 was about a young boy who was born in poverty, but how he changed his destiny and
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 rich at
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 young age. Honestly, before reading
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book
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 I always used to fear to do something new.
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,
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book
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 gave me the courage that if you have a strong
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then
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 you can achieve anything in life. At present, because of
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book
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book,
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 I never say no to new opportunities that
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in
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my way. I am certain that there are hundreds of people just like me who
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 the same fear, the one I used to have.
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 why, I want to take
this
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 opportunity to encourage all those people with my personal story. I believe they would relate
themselves
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with
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to
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 my story and will read
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book
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 and
will
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start doing the impossible things. I would really appreciate
if
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it if
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 you
can
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 provide me
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this
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 golden chance. I look forward to hearing back. Yours faithfully,
Samandeep
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Sandeep
 Kaur

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task achievement
Ensure to proofread for minor grammatical errors and inconsistencies. For example, 'an article in a magazine' should be 'the magazine' or 'the article in the magazine.'
single idea per paragraph
Make sure each paragraph presents a single main idea clearly and develops it fully. This enhances the readability and coherence of the text.
task achievement
You have effectively addressed all parts of the prompt, describing the book, its impact on you, and its potential impact on others.
suitable writing tone
The letter is polite and appropriately formal, making it suitable for the context of writing to an editor.
logical structure
The letter is well-organized, with distinct paragraphs for each aspect of the prompt, which makes it easy to follow.
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