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The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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This
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 report derives from the listed line graph which enumerates the proportion of the variation in the prices of three metals, especially Cooper,
Nickel
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, and
Zinc
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, during 2014. A glance at the chart clearly reveals that all the trends encountered substantial fluctuations
along with
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 a plateau
since
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 June to September
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2014.
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, the price of
cooper
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copper
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 and
Nickel
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 declined throughout the entire period
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 the price of
Zinc
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 increased slightly. To be specific, the oscillations of the
Zinc
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 and Copper are relatively stable compared to the
Nickel
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. The worth figures of
Nickel
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 tremendously downturned, comprising a solid 6% at the very beginning followed by a remarkable gap in June of -3% which is the most nadir figure
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 a firm 1%
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. Regarding the copper shift, it had a decent decrease from a firm 2% in January to approximately 1.5% in December. In stark contrast to the tendency of the price, the rate of
zinc
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 in January resulted in a strong 1% to a solid 2% ultimately.

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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words nickel, zinc with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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