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The table below shows how the UK unemployed spent their time last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows how the UK unemployed spent their time last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The figure presents the usage of
time
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 of the UK unemployed
last
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 year.
Overall
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, both
men
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 and
women
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 spent their
time
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 on
Housework
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, Shopping and Job Hunting in the morning.
However
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, in the afternoon, something changed.
Men
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 tended to watch TV and
did
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do
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 some gardening work,
while
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women
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 were more likely to do
housework
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, shopping and
visiting
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visit
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 friends or relatives. In the morning, 22% of
men
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 spent
time
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 on job hunting, which was the most. Shopping and
housework
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 had slightly lower
percentage
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percentages
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, of 20% and 19%. These three
behaviour
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behaviours
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 were
top
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the top
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 three
men
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 doing before lunch. Though the top three were the same, about 50% of
women
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 spent their
time
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 on
housework
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, which was much more than
men
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. As for the behaviour in the afternoon, 14% of the
men
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 would watch TV, which is the most. Gardening, visiting friends and relatives, and job hunting are almost the same as watching TV.
Women
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,
however
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, still did their
housework
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 in the afternoon, for around 20%.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words time, men, women, housework with synonyms.
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