The table below shows how the UK unemployed spent their time last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows how the UK unemployed spent their time last year.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The figure presents the usage of
time
of the UK unemployed
last
year.
Overall
, both
men
and
women
spent their
time
on
Housework
, Shopping and Job Hunting in the morning.
However
, in the afternoon, something changed.
Men
tended to watch TV and
did
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some gardening work,
while
women
were more likely to do
housework
, shopping and
visiting
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visit
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friends or relatives. In the morning, 22% of
men
spent
time
on job hunting, which was the most. Shopping and
housework
had slightly lower
percentage
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percentages
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, of 20% and 19%. These three
behaviour
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behaviours
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were
top
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the top
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three
men
doing before lunch. Though the top three were the same, about 50% of
women
spent their
time
on
housework
, which was much more than
men
. As for the behaviour in the afternoon, 14% of the
men
would watch TV, which is the most. Gardening, visiting friends and relatives, and job hunting are almost the same as watching TV.
Women
,
however
, still did their
housework
in the afternoon, for around 20%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words time, men, women, housework with synonyms.
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