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The charts below show the average percentage in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much. Summarise the inforamtion by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the average percentage in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much. Summarise the inforamtion by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The figure illustrates the daily consumption of three various kinds of nutrients including sodium, saturated fat and added sugars by Americans at breakfast, lunch, dinner and as
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sanck
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snack
.
Overall
, It is evident from the data that each
nutrients
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nutrient
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 is consumed in different amounts per
meals
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meal
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.
Overall
, the pie chart indicates that Americans prefer fat and salty dinners. In fact, the graph shows
approximatly
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approximately
 half of the amount of sodium
were
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 consumed during
night
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the night
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 for dinner and below 40% saturated fat
were
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 used
while
 preparing the mentioned meal. On the other side, the US
popualtion
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population
have
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 the highest percentage of sugar usage during
thier
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their
 snack times. Based on the
information driven
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 by the chart, we can claim that breakfast is the healthiest meal
of
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 the American community. Generally, the lowest percentage of mentioned nutrients were used in
prepration
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preparation
of
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for
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 breakfast. Dinner can be rated as the second
healthies
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healthiest
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 meal. In conclusion,
over consumption
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overconsumption
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 of fat and sodium during
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the nigth
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nigth
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night
as well as
high
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a high
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 percentage of sugar rate in snacks can result in an
unheathy
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unhealthy
 diet in
US
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the US
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.
However
, the data shows that the morning meals are more
bakanced
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balanced
 and close to healthy.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall".
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amounts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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