People in all modern societies use drugs, but today’s youth are experimenting with both legal and illegal drugs, and at an increasing early stage. Discuss the causes and some effects of the widespread drug use by young people. Give some recommendations that can be implemented.
In modern societies, there are many youths that
using
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use
drugs
, either legal or illegal and this
issue increase
from Correct subject-verb agreement
increases
time
to time
. This
has negative impacts for young generations because they are future
of the nation. There are some reasons why Correct article usage
the future
this
problem can happen, such
as there is no an
adequate education or socializing about the danger of Correct article usage
apply
drugs
. Definitely, by consuming drugs
, youth
have potential
to die.
First of all, the biggest causes that make Correct article usage
the potential
young
generation use Correct article usage
the young
drugs
because they are not aware of the bad sides and do not know how to escape if they already too rely on it
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apply
due to
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apply
drugs
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drug
is
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an
addiction. The government has failed to educate their Correct article usage
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youth
to not consume drugs
. Since youth
do not know many
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much
informations
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information
of
it, they can not differentiate which Change preposition
about
drugs
that
they can consume and Correct pronoun usage
apply
they
can not. Correct pronoun usage
which they
For example
, they consume some drugs
for
tackle their headache or insomnia. But, they continuously consume it. So, the Change preposition
to
drugs
can recovery
their ache in Replace the word
recover
temporary
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a temporary
time
and the government just socialize
the danger of Correct subject-verb agreement
socializes
drugs
occasionally.
Obviously, this
problem have
several effects. Change the verb form
has
Firstly
, youth
will feel addicted to the
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apply
drugs
. Then
, they use it for a long time
. Before their condition become
worse, there are some changes Correct subject-verb agreement
becomes
of
their body and Change preposition
in
healthy
. To illustrate, they will get tired easily, their face will look so pale, they do not have Replace the word
health
energy
to do anything, etc. Eventually, the worst case is they will die if they do not seek help to get out Change the article
the energy
from
the Change preposition
of
drugs
.
To conclude
, this
case is dangerous. By knowing the reasons, the government can reflect on it and try to find the
solutions. Not only thatCorrect article usage
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,
but Remove the comma
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also
the effects will help youth
to decrease the consumption of drugs
. Still, I highly recommend to youth
to use receipt
from the doctor if they want to eat legal Fix the agreement mistake
receipts
drugs
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