Task 1: The chart below shows the number of adults participating in different major sports in one area, in 1997 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Task 1: The chart below shows the number of adults participating in different major sports in one area, in 1997 and 2017. 

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart gives
an information
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information
a piece of information
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about the change in the
number
of adult participants in various
sports
in a particular region
from1997
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from 1997
to 2017.
Overall
, there has been a significant surge in the amount of individuals playing basketball, football and rugby,
wheras
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whereas
where
the amount of ones
played
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playing
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cricket has dramatically declined after two decades. Tennis participants showed
slight
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a slight
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increase, but it had the highest
participants
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number of participants
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among all
sports
in
both
years; 1997 and 2017. In 1997, the
number
of
adults
playing basketball was the least among the major
sports
practiced
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practised
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in
this
area.
However
, after two decades, a dramatic climb in their
number
to around 22,000
players
was seen. Other
sports
has
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have
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rocketed as well
such
as football and rugby, in which
number
of the
players
of
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in
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both
games was almost the same in 1997, which counted for a little higher than 30 thousand
adults
.
Both
sports
showed a similar rate of increase reaching a
number
of slightly lower than 50 thousands. Tennis
players
were the highest in
both
years, yet showed a slight increase from 50 to 55 thousand
players
. There was a
noticable
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noticeable
drop in the
number
of
adults
participated
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who participated
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in cricket from 26000 to less than 10,000
adults
. No significant
change
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changes
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were noticed in the rest of the
sports
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, sports, both, adults, players with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "dramatically" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 3 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • participation rate
  • increase/decrease in numbers
  • trend
  • decade
  • relatively stable
  • major sports
  • potential reasons
  • contributing factors
  • public interest
  • comparison
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