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There is too much noise in many public places in cities. What are the causes of this problem? What can be done to solve the problem?

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In contemporary times, there is too much disturbance in a
lot
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 of community centres in
metropolis
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the metropolis
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.
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 the are many reasons for
this
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, the condition can be solved in different
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. There are
number
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a number
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 of reasons why
this
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 is the case, including
traffic
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 congestion, industrial activities and others.
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there
are
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is
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 a
lot
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 of noise
by
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from
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traffic
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jam
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jams
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. Because
of
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of this
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,
traffic
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 is very fast on the roads. So, it leads to these reasons engine noises and unbroken honking. One of the causes,
the
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abudance
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abundance
 of industrial activities. Certainly,
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this
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 actions guide many sounds and environmental degradation.
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 is because, there are a
lot
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 of fabrics, bars, restaurants and
anothers
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others
 in
city
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the city
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. The situation can be changed for the better by doing
legel
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legal
 measures, urban green spaces and other
ways
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. One of the major
solution
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for
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to
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 problems make legal provisions.
For instance
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,
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there is
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is
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are
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 organized fines and penalties for noise
destroy
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destruction
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 to deter sound pollution by
legel
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legal
scholar
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scholars
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. Once more, it is necessary
increasing
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to increase
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 parks,green areas, playgrounds and other locations in
city
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the city
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 and public places. Absolutely,
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this
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these
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 areas help to absorb disturbance and stay
slient
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silent
. One of the other
ways
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,
instealling
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is installing
 a
lot
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 of noise barriers which
sound proof
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soundproof
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 barriers along highways and construction sites.
Also
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, some more
solution
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solutions
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 promoting mass transit.
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 to say, inspiring
use
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the use
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 of buses and trains to reduce
traffic
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 sounds. In a nutshell,
this
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 is
problem
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a problem
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which
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in which
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 too much disturbance in cities be changed for the better by doing legitimate actions, urban green locations, sound barriers and other
ways
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.

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task achievement
Try to include more specific examples to support your points. This will help clarify your ideas and make your arguments more persuasive.
coherence cohesion
Work on enhancing the logical structure of your paragraphs. Ensure that each paragraph focuses on a single main idea and flows smoothly into the next.
coherence cohesion
Your essay has a clear introduction and conclusion, which helps in providing a structured response.
task achievement
You have identified some relevant causes and solutions to the issue of noise in public places, addressing the task effectively.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • noise pollution
  • urbanization
  • population density
  • traffic congestion
  • infrastructure development
  • public announcement systems
  • street performances
  • noise regulations
  • soundproof materials
  • public transportation
  • designated quiet zones
  • green spaces
  • buffer zones
  • public awareness
  • community efforts
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