There is too much noise in many public places in cities. What are the causes of this problem? What can be done to solve the problem?
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barriers along highways and construction sites. Correct your spelling
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solutions
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Try to include more specific examples to support your points. This will help clarify your ideas and make your arguments more persuasive.
coherence cohesion
Work on enhancing the logical structure of your paragraphs. Ensure that each paragraph focuses on a single main idea and flows smoothly into the next.
coherence cohesion
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task achievement
You have identified some relevant causes and solutions to the issue of noise in public places, addressing the task effectively.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite