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The bar chart below shows the popularity of well-known Instagram accounts in 2018 and 2021. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows the popularity of well-known Instagram accounts in 2018 and 2021. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
#bar #popularity #instagram #accounts #information #features #comparisons
The bar chart provides information concerning the
number of
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popularity
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the popularity
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 of well-known
instagram
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acconts
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accounts
 from the
year
 2018 to 2021. Generally speaking , it can be seen that Cristiano Ronaldo has the highest rate of
folowers
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followers
flowers
 in
year
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the year
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 2021.
As well as
Selena
 Gomes has
growth
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 in
flowoers
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flowers
 in
year
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the year
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 2018.
In addition
, Ariana Grande has 130
million
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which
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wich
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which
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 is as good as
Selena
 Ever since, it
clear
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 that
Selena
 Gomes has the most well-known account in 2018 with almost 120
million
 . Followed by Cristiano Ronaldo with 110
million
.Moving to the
year
 2021 we can see that Cristiano Ronaldo climbed up with 315
million
 figure .
Furthermore
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 it has
a
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strike
similareties
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similarities
 in numbers with The Rock , Ariana Grande and Kylie Jenner with 250
million
 .
Moreover
,
Selena
 Gomes has the lowest known in 2021 with a propurtion240
million
convesely
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conversely
 to the
year
 2018 .
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Vocabulary: Replace the words year, selena, million with synonyms.
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