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The chart below shows the amount spent on six consumer goods in four European countries.

The chart below shows the amount spent on six consumer goods in four European countries.
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The bar graph depicts the actual information about
amount
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the amount
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 spent on consumer goods between four
countries
(Germany,Italy,France,
Britain
) in five spheres.
Overall
,
Britain
the
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has the
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 biggest share of
amount
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the amount
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 spent on consumer goods in all spheres.Compared to other
countries
Britain
 had the biggest value in each
spheres
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,
while
 Germany.
share
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 the smallest
of
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the
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amount
,in each
of
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sphere. Of the four
countries
,
Britain
 had the largest
amount
of
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spent in the sphere of photographic film with the number of 170 thousand pounds sterling,and the sphere of personal stereos had the smallest value in
Britain
. Germany with the industry of
Cds
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CDs
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,perfumes,Tennis racquets,Personal stereos,Toys,
Photographic
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and Photographic
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 film had the
smallest
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lowest
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 value
between
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among
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 all
countries
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words amount, countries, britain with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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