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The charts below show the distribution of the world's water and the usage of water in three countries.

The charts below show the distribution of the world's water and the usage of water in three countries.
The pie charts provide information about the
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 distribution in the world, and the second bar chart displays the
water
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usage
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 across three countries, namely Egypt, Saudi Arabia, and Canada.
It is clear that
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 the major source of total
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 is salt
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, and the majority of
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freshwater
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water
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 comes from ice and glaciers.
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, the largest
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usage
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 is for agriculture in Egypt and Saudi Arabia.
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, Canada consumes a significant amount of
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 for industry. Looking at the information in more detail, 97% of all
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 is salt
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.
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, the largest proportion of fresh
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 is ice and glaciers at 79%, followed by groundwater, which accounts for 20%. The remaining percentage is from surface
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, which constitutes 1% of fresh
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. Moving on to the bar chart, agricultural
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usage
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 in Egypt and Saudi Arabia is as follows: the former is nearly 80%, and the latter is approximately 75%. As for domestic
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usage
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, the three countries display similar percentages ranging between 11% and 12%. It is notable that roughly 80% of
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usage
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 in Canada is for industry, which is higher than in
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other countries.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 70%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, usage with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "displays" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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