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The images below explains the process of how pollutants from modern life become acid rain that in turn pollutes the environment and the food chain. summarise the information by selecting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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The given images present information about the process by which
pollutants
 from modern life become acid rain that,
therefore
, pollutes the environment and the food chain.
Overall
, it can be seen that there are a number of
pollutants
 that rise to
clouds
.
According to
 the information, we can suggest that there are main three
pollutants
: carbon dioxide, sulphur dioxide, mercury and other components. These
pollutants
 appear in parts of modern life,
such
 as housing, transport, factories
and
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etc.
As a result
, we can see polluted
clouds
.
Subsequently
, they cross different countries and continents. In comparison with simple
clouds
,
this
 type of
clouds
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cloud
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give
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 us acid rain. The most noticeable is that rain falls on rivers, lakes and
other
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others
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. Following that,
pollutants
 enter
environment
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the environment
an environment
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, including
food
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the food
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 chain. Nowadays,
this
 process become
an
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a
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 continuous cycle, which can lead to problems with human health.
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introduction conclusion present
Strengthen the conclusion by summarizing the key points discussed and emphasizing the overall impact of acid rain on the environment and food chain.
relevant specific examples
Provide more detailed examples to illustrate how the pollutants specifically affect the food chain and human health.
supported main points
Ensure that each main point is well supported with clear details and explanations. For example, how exactly do pollutants from housing and transport contribute to acid rain?
clear comprehensive ideas
The essay clearly describes the overall process of how pollutants from modern life result in acid rain.
introduction conclusion present
The introduction provides a clear overview of the images and what the essay will discuss.
logical structure
The logical structure of the essay is easy to follow, with a clear progression from pollution sources to the impact of acid rain.

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