Some people think that adverts control what we purchase, while others think they are useful sources of information on products. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

In our contemporary world
adverts
became
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integral
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part of our lives.Ads are able to announce
newfounded
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newly founded
features of specific companies or even tell about upcoming
products
of next
years
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.
While
numerous individuals think that
advertisement
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advertisements
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control what we purchase,others cling to the point of view of
adverts
as
an
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useful source informing of
products
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product
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innovations.In
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both opinions will be
disscused
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discussed
before giving my own
opinion
.
Firstly
,we have an
opinion
of
advertizing
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advertising
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as
ability
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the ability
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to control
over
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society
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purchases.
For example
,
according to
an article published in New Your Times in 2015,a survey of
products
which were
advertized
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advertised
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were
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bought
often
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more often
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for
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by
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over 65.5%
than
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more than
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other
companies
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companies'
company's
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unadvertized
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advertised
unadvertised
products
.
This
shows that
adverts
building
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an
assosiation
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association
over
products
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products'
product's
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healthiness or
moderness
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modernness
.With that being said public promotions can be considered as
the
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apply
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part of a tool to control
over
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apply
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potential
costumers
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customers
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predispositions.
On the other
hand
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we have an
opinion
of advertising
being
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is
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an
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a
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useful source of novelty.
For instance
,
according to
an article published in CNN in 2018,
a
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research of modern advertisement helpfulness,
showing
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shows
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over 91.9% of
adverts
utility.The example shows
an
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actual usefulness of
advertizement
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in
concurrent
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the concurrent
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world.
This
means modern advertisement sources are
being
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relevant for people. To summarise,
while
advertizements
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advertisements
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can change
people
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people's
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buying preferences,
it
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they
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can still keep people all over the world informed of
nuvelties
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novelties
.My
opinion
is,and it is confirmed that advertisements
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as
an
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utility on the informing of
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novelties
task.
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introductions conclusions
Your introduction is clear and sets the stage for the essay. However, it would benefit from a better separation of ideas and a more concise structure.
grammatical errors
Try to avoid minor grammatical errors and improve the fluency of your writing by proofreading your text. This can enhance the overall readability.
supporting ideas
The essay would benefit from providing more specific examples and elaboration on how advertisements function as an informative source or as a controlling mechanism.
paragraphing
Make sure to break down your essay into smaller paragraphs to improve readability and better coherence between ideas.
balanced discussion
Your essay reflects a balanced discussion of both opinions, showing that you understand different perspectives on advertisements.
conclusion summary
Your conclusion effectively summarizes the main points discussed, reinforcing your personal stance on the issue.

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