Some say you should always marry for love; others say that in an uncertain world it’s wiser to marry for money. Discuss both points of view and give your own opinion.
In
this
thriving world where people
tend to romanticize love
, many people
argue whether to marry the person
they love
or the person
who has the wealth
they need for life.
Since childhood, children are taught that the foundation of marriage is love
. There are instances or point
in life when a Fix the agreement mistake
points
person
get
married, one can question why they marry their spouse and it's because of Change the verb form
gets
love
. People
start a relationship due to
the feeling they have toward that
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the
person
they are interested in. An example for
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of
that is
when two couple
get Fix the agreement mistake
couples
marry
since they Wrong verb form
married
are
together for how many years, they will still fix and understand each other because of Wrong verb form
have been
love
. Thus
, marrying the one you love
and put
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putting
love
as the foundation of the relationship will help it lasts
longer.
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last
On the other hand
, there are unfortunate people
who grow up thriving without the wealth
they need. For them, one way to survive and raise their family in this
practical world is to marry someone with huge
amount of money in their pocket Add an article
a huge
the huge
eventhough
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even though
love
. As some TV shows portrays
about fiancee's journey to marry, some Change the verb form
portray
people
in slums tend to find their spouse who has more income rather than finding their true love
. Therefore
, the main factor for them to marry is the wealth
of the
future partner.
In conclusion, there are Change the word
their
people
who still romanticize their marriage with love
and how this
can affect their relationship. On the other hand
, people
who need money will opt to choose the path of marrying the person
who has much to offer such
as wealth
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task achievement
Ensure that each paragraph contains clear and comprehensive ideas that fully answer the question. Your points about marrying for love and money are good but could be explored in more depth.
coherence cohesion
When introducing and concluding your essay, ensure that these sections clearly outline your main points and summarize them effectively. Your introduction was clear, but your conclusion could reiterate the main points for better emphasis.
task achievement
Use more specific examples to support your arguments. For instance, you could provide real-life examples or more detailed hypothetical scenarios to make your points more convincing.
task achievement
The introduction effectively sets up the essay's theme and clearly presents the two opposing views.
coherence cohesion
You have a clear structure with distinct paragraphs for each main point, which helps the coherence of your essay.
Your opinion
Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.
If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.
Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.
Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:
...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?