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The bar chart below shows the popularity of well-known Instagram accounts in 2018 and 2021. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows the popularity of well-known Instagram accounts in 2018 and 2021. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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bar
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 specifics concerning the
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popularity of well-known Instagram accounts from the years 2018 and 2021.
Overall
 from a closer inspection of the
graph
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 it is obvious that
bar
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the bar
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chart
 showed a
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downward
 trend
while
 the trend of
bar
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chart
withessed
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was
the
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reverse
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. The figure
of
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bar
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chart
 started the period meaningfully higher than
other
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another bar chart
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bar
chart
 at 325 million. The figure increased slightly in 2018 before starting to
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plummet
 remarkably ending with 240 million in the given period. Contrary to that it can be
compare
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 hended
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. There was a
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 up with from 240 million
caveusely
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conversely
 to the year 2018
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