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You need a website for your business, and you would like to ask your friend to build it. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter •Include a brief description of your business •Explain what you would like to have on the website •Provide some ideas on the use of images on the website.

#website #business #friend #•include #description #•explain #•provide #images
Hello, my dear friend. I hope
this
 letter
find
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finds
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 you
good
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. I know that you are working
in
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on
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 a
websites
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website
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developing
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. I am interested in the new website for my humble business, and I know how responsible men are
you
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apply
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. So, I wanted to ask you to
work
 with me on my new site. As you know, I have
runned
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 the tiny confectionary with
the
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a
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 variety of cakes for special events.
Firstly
, I have a lot of pictures of my previous cakes, I think it'll be better to use them in your
work
.
Moreover
, I have many
fedbacks
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feedbacks
 and reviews from my customers and their children, who enjoyed my cakes on their holidays.
Besides
, there are many pictures that these children drew for me with their
greatings
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greetings
. Now
then
, I want my site to include
an examples
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examples
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 of my
work
, prices, and reviews.
At
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 the first
page
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 we can insert the history of my bakery, and the story about my dream that
come
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came
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 true. Let me know, please, if you are interested
to
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in working
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work
 with me. Best regards, always
yours'
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yours
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. Anastassia.
Submitted by anastasia on

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Grammar
Focus on minor grammatical errors such as 'find' should be 'finds', 'run' should be 'run,' 'fedbacks' should be 'feedback,' etc.
Coherence and Cohesion
Enhance coherence by connecting different sections of the letter more smoothly. For example, you can use transitional words like 'However,' 'Additionally,' etc.
Tone
The tone of the letter is friendly and suitable for a personal request.
Task Achievement
The letter includes all required information: a brief description of the business, website content details, and use of images.
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