The charts below show the levels of participation in education and science in developing and industrialised countries in 1980 and 1990.
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countries
in 1980 and 1990.
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were lower.
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was almost 2.5 years, Use synonyms
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countries
was higher at about 9 years. Use synonyms
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countries
increased dramatically and reached approximately 3 and 10.5 years respectively. Use synonyms
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for participating in scientists and technicians in developing Use synonyms
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was just over 4000 Use synonyms
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about more than 1500 Use synonyms
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about 6000 Use synonyms
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, in 1980, the amount of spending money in developing Linking Words
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was 50 dollars, Use synonyms
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was higher at nearly 150 $. In 1990, the Use synonyms
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