The charts below show the levels of participation in education and science in developing and industrialised countries in 1980 and 1990.

The charts below show the levels of participation in education and

science in developing and industrialised countries in 1980 and 1990.
The bar charts illustrate the comparison of attending
in
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science
and education in developing and industrialised
countries
in 1980 and 1990. It is clearly observed that industrialised
countries
had the highest in schooling and
science
,
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while
developing
countries
were lower. In detail in 1980, the
figure
for education in industrialised
countries
was almost 2.5 years,
whereas
that of industrialised
countries
was higher at about 9 years.
Also
, in 1990 the
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average of schooling in developing and industrialised
countries
increased dramatically and reached approximately 3 and 10.5 years respectively.
In addition
, in 1980, the
figure
for participating in scientists and technicians in developing
countries
was nearly 1000
people
,
while
that of industrialised
countries
was just over 4000
people
. In 1990, in developing
countries
about more than 1500
people
attended in
science
and in industrialised
countries
about 6000
people
participated in
science
.
Therefore
, in 1980, the amount of spending money in developing
countries
was 50 dollars,
whereas
,
that
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industrialised
countries
was higher at nearly 150 $. In 1990, the
figure
for expenditure on
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in industrialised
countries
rose significantly by 200 $.
By contrast
,
this
figure
for developing
countries
declined slightly
about
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25 dollars.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • enrollment rates
  • primary education
  • secondary education
  • tertiary education
  • literacy rates
  • scientific research
  • research and development (R&D)
  • correlation
  • gender disparities
  • participation
  • developing countries
  • industrialized countries
  • investment
  • comparison
  • impact
  • specified years
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