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The graph below shows the usage of oil in four different countries between 1966 and 2006 as a percentage of total energuy use within each nation.

The graph below shows the usage of oil in four different countries between 1966 and 2006 as a percentage of total energuy use within each nation.
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each country by their usage of oil between 1966 and 2006 starting with Italy, in 1966 Iceland was the highest and in almost every year it stayed that way.
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, Turkey was the second highest country of all by and even
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higher than Italy in 2006 .
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 Sweden in 1966 it was pretty high
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 it had a sudden fall down.
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, Iceland was and is the lowest country of all from 1966 to 2006

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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