The graph below shows the usage of oil in four different countries between 1966 and 2006 as a percentage of total energuy use within each nation.

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each country by their usage of oil between 1966 and 2006 starting with Italy, in 1966 Iceland was the highest and in almost every year it stayed that way.

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, Turkey was the second highest country of all by and even

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higher than Italy in 2006 .

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Sweden in 1966 it was pretty high

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it had a sudden fall down.

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, Iceland was and is the lowest country of all from 1966 to 2006

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