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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.The line graph below shows changes in the amount and type of fast food consumed by Australian teenagers from 1975 to 2000.Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.Write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.The line graph below shows changes in the amount and type of fast food consumed by Australian teenagers from 1975 to 2000.Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.Write at least 150 words.
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The line graph depicts changes in the consumption and kind of fast food
ate
Change the form of the verb
eaten
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 by Australian teenagers between 1975
until
Correct word choice
and
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 2000.
Overall
, between
three
Correct article usage
the three
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 types of food, only fish and chips
that
Correct pronoun usage
apply
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experience
Wrong verb form
experienced
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Correct article usage
a decreased
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decreased
Replace the word
decrease
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. The others are constantly increased from time to time.
First,
in 1975, pizza was consumed by Australian teenagers approximately 8
times
. Surprisingly, the interest
to consume
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in consuming
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 pizza continuously up until hit
the
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its
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 peak at 82
times
 in 1995.
Then
, from 1995 to 2000, the consumption was flat. Moving to others, hamburgers had
starting
Correct article usage
a starting
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 point about 10
times
.
Subsequently
, steadily rose
up
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apply
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to 82
times
 in
years
Correct article usage
the years
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 1985. But, same as pizza, hamburgers
stucked
Correct your spelling
stuck
stacked
 in 1995 to 2000 at 100
times
.
Initially
, fish and chips had a good start by 100
times
 in 1975. In 1980, hit the valley
at
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apply
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82
times
.
Next,
continually experienced fluctuations until 1985. Afterwards, significantly slumped to 40
times
 in 2000. Respectively in 1985, 1990, 1995, and 2000.
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