The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.
The provided pie charts represent what percentage
sodium
, saturated fat and added sugar are included in a typical meal in the USA.
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of sodium
Overall
, we can see that sodium
and saturated fat make up the vast majority in
dinners, Change preposition
of
while
added sugar is mostly included in snacks
.
Sodium
contained in dinner with %43 and then
in lunch
with %29. The least sodium contained
meals Correct your spelling
sodium-containing
are
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is
breakfast
and snacks
with %14, which are lowest
number Change the article
the lowest
of
whole pie chartsChange preposition
in
..
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.
...
Moreover
, all of
three unhealthy nutrients are consumed at least in Change preposition
apply
breakfast
. Saturated fat is an
nutrient which subsumed in Change the article
a
mostly
Correct your spelling
most
dinner
as same as Fix the agreement mistake
dinners
sodium
with %37. After it contained in lunch
with %26. Moreover
, it subsumed in breakfast
with %16 before snacks
with %21.
Lastly
, added sugar generally
consumed in Add a missing verb
is generally
snacks
with
42 Change preposition
at
percentage
, after Replace the word
per cent
in
dinner with %23. It is subsumed in Change preposition
apply
lunch
with %19, while
it is just lower than lunch
with %3 in breakfast
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