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The charts below show the results of a survey of the primary exercise objectives and locations of a selected group of adults between 20 and 50 years of age. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the results of a survey of the primary exercise objectives and locations of a selected group of adults between 20 and 50 years of age. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The diagram illustrates the statistics about people who
exercise
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 to show reasons why they
exercise
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, and where they prefer to do that.
Overall
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, the majority of people choose to
exercise
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 seeking recreation and muscle toning, and they prefer to do that in public sports venues mostly. First and foremost,
although
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 a variety of goals that you may gain for
exercise
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, recreation and muscle toning are the most important things 40% and 25%, respectively, of the population want to have these things
as a result
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.
On the other hand
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, when it comes to weight loss, disease prevention and mood improvements the numbers show a decline as they are not priorities for the nation.
Secondly
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,
although
Linking Words
 gyms are well known as places for
exercise
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, public sports venues have a higher percentage forming 35% of the pie, followed by parks which 20% of the society considers exercising there is a privilege.
Moreover
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, gyms, playgrounds and other public places have formed 15 each, as they were the least chosen places for
exercise
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "although".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words exercise with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 2 times.
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