Some people think that competation at work, at school and daily life is a good thing. Others believe that we should try to cooperate more, rather than competing against each other. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Some

people

believe that

competation

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competition

in our life is a good thing.

While

Other

people

think we should help each other,

instead

of competing with others. In

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essay, I will discuss both views and my opinion

at the end

. On the one hand, some

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people

think competition is better than cooperation. First of all, when

people

challenge each other at

the

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work or school, there will be more produce and that will

effect

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the country. Because every person wants to be the best.

Secondly

, the companies will be more active.

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, every year Seven Up and Sprite

they

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compete. In 2011 profits 7up more than Sprite and the next year Sprite made more profits. The customers are

also

beneficiaries because every company work hard.

On the other hand

, other

people

believe cooperation is better. One of the reasons cooperation is better

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is because when the worker or the student helps each other, the

people

will be kind and love the other.

Moreover

, the project will be more creative, everyone put their idea into the project and that will help the project to be stronger.

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also

important to highlight that, if the

people

help each other, they will spread peace and love in the world. In the end, some

people

think

challenge

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each other in the work or school

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good

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thing, but others

against

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this

idea. I believe

cooperertion

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cooperation

is better than competition, because that will help all the society and all

people

, not only some the

people

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Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

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