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The chart and table below give information about what nursing graduates did after finishing their course in the UK in 2009. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart and table below give information about what nursing graduates did after finishing their course in the UK in 2009. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The chart and table illustrate the distribution of what
nurses
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 do after graduating from their course in the UK in 2009.
Overall
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,
nurses
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 in the UK would like to
work
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 in the
health
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sector
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 the most,
whereas
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 very few
people
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chose
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 to study
further
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. Meanwhile, working at a hospital was the highest choice among other categories in the
health
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sector
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. The percentage of
nurses
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that
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who
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 decided to
work
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 in the
health
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sector
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 far exceeded that of
people
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 who wanted to
work
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 and study at the same time, with respective figures being 84% and 8%. Meanwhile, the proportion of
people
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that
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who
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 could not find a job was 4%, double that of
nurses
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 who wanted to study more or other choices (2%). Looking at the
health
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sector
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, we can see that nearly 80% of
people
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 wanted to
work
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 at the hospital. In second place were midwifery jobs with 12.4%, which was followed by community nurse positions with 10.3% of total participants.
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 came graduates employed in other, paramedic, and mental nurse roles, accounting for a negligible 2.7%, 1.3% and 0.4% respectively.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words nurses, work, health, sector, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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