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You recently stayed in a hotel and left an item in the room. Write a letter to the manager of the hotel. In your letter: ● describe the item that you left in the room ● explain where you think the item might be ● suggest how the manager can return the item to you

#hotel #item #room #manager
Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing
this
 letter to request you to search
an
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for an
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 item I
forget
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forgot
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 in your hotel
room
 during an event. My name is Kanchan Bhatia, I was staying in your hotel on July 05,
2024
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2024,
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 in
Room
 506. I checked out on the same date. Unfortunately,
while
 wrapping up in
hurry
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a hurry
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, I forget my black leather wallet inside
room
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the room
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. About the description of
wallet
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the wallet
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, it has three pockets and a chain. It is of
Zara
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the Zara
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 brand.
Moreover
, I think it might be inside the locker
of
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room
 because I remembered
last
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the last
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 time I placed
inside
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it inside
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 the locker. It has my credit cards and some cash which I want to save. Apparently, if you find my wallet kindly mail be
on
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to
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 178
evby avenue
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Evby Avenue
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 Canada. I will pay you the cost of
shipment
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the shipment
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. Hopefully, you will assist me. Looking forward to hearing from you soon. Yours faithfully, Waris
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task achievement
Ensure to proofread for minor grammar and spelling errors, such as 'forget' instead of 'forgot' and 'About the description of wallet' which should be 'Regarding the description of the wallet.' These small mistakes can slightly lower the overall readability of your letter.
task achievement
A little more detail on how the manager can return the wallet could be added, like suggesting the use of a specific courier service. This shows thoroughness in your request.
coherence cohesion
The letter follows a clear and logical structure, starting with an introduction, followed by the description of the item, the likely location, and ending with a suggestion for returning it. This is very effective for coherence and cohesion.
task achievement
The tone of the letter is polite and appropriate for a formal context, showing good control over suitable writing tone.
coherence cohesion
Each paragraph focuses on a single idea, making it easy for the reader to follow and understand your points.
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