The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph shows trends in shop
closures
and
openings
of new
shops
in a particular country between the
years
2011 and 2018. In 2011 approximately 6,400
shops
closed. The
number
of
closures
fluctuated over the next four
years
until 2015
,
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when there was a dramatic fall in
closures
to roughly 100
shops
. The following year the
number
of
shops
closing their doors rose sharply, reaching over 5,000. The figures remained steady for the next two
years
, with just over 5,000
closures
in 2018. The
number
of new
shops
opening decreased dramatically between 2011 (approximately 8,500) and 2012 (just under 4,000) but rebounded by roughly 50% by 2014. In 2015, the
number
of
openings
then
fell to the 2012 level
,
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but remained stable for the next two
years
. The
last
recorded year, 2018, saw a
further
fall to 3,000 new
openings
, the lowest point in
this
seven year
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period.
Overall
, the
number
of shop
closures
has remained within the 5,000 to 7,000 range (with the exception of 2015).
In contrast
, new shop
openings
have shown a wider range of figures, but generally indicate a downward trend over the same period.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Replace the words closures, openings, shops, years, number with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trends" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "roughly" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "dramatic" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • retail landscape
  • net growth
  • market dynamics
  • economic indicators
  • fluctuations
  • pivotal
  • consumption patterns
  • e-commerce
  • brick-and-mortar
  • downward/upward trend
  • stabilize
  • recession
  • boom
  • retail sector
  • closure rate
  • inauguration/opening rate
  • consumer market
  • saturate
  • commercial viability
  • profitability
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